The background details about the plot as well as the premise were very well presented - you've thought out the story quite well! However, there were hyperlinks throughout the story that lead back to the page that were a little distracting from the overall text - maybe you could fix that? Also, the pacing of the story and the paragraph describing the plane journey could be more articulate, I feel. A great chapter overall though :)
Thanks for the review! I tried to fix the hyperlinks. Have no idea how that happened. I'll try convey things a little more clearly in the next chapter. There just so much I've thought out that I don't want to push everything out too quickly. Thanks for the feedback! :)