/comment.php?article_id=1104807&from=notstory
Comments - 【徵求評論心得】最弱的我其實乃最強？ | Penana
arrow_back
Comments - 【徵求評論心得】最弱的我其實乃最強？
info_outline
format_color_text
toc
comment 0
exposure_plus_1
coins
Search stories, writers or societies
Show More Tags
Continue ReadingClear All
More
What Others Are ReadingRefresh
See more results for ""
X
Never miss what's happening on Penana!
Turn on notifications
Later
Login with Facebook or Sign up/Login to leave a comment.
精靈聖殿
折羽大大你好，謝謝你的建議!關於句子的部分有點不太明白，想請問大大是否可以舉個例子呢?因為這樣說，我們也不知道哪邊的詳寫是不重要，哪邊的節奏很奇怪@@關於城主那一段我們會再好好討論的!謝謝!
1 year agoReply
迷途公子
也分不清脹紅的臉龐究竟是因為運動的疲勞還是被嘲諷的羞恥

建議：脹紅的臉龐不知道是因為飛翔的疲勞，還是被嘲諷的羞恥


巨翅加速揮舞沉重大刀<–這個折羽看不懂
1 year agoReply
精靈聖殿
@❦小公主❦折羽殿下Oriha,謝謝大大!我們會再好好想想的!
1 year agoReply
Back to Story
×
×
Write down what you like about the story
×
Reading Theme:

Font Size:

Line Spacing:

Paragraph Spacing:

Load the next issue automatically


Reset to default

X
×
x
Proceed

arrow_back
×
×

Install this webapp for easier offline reading: tap and then Add to home screen.