If Adalene goes to the plateau bc it’s beautiful, she is paying attention to the things that make it that way. Maybe change ’variety of flowers’ to describing what flowers are there and how they flowed across the view. If this was peters pov he might not notice the flowers or know what they’re called, so variety of flowers or bunch of flowers would be more fitting. Good writing tho!!
Ooh, sheesh...this chapter is uh...it's a bit...mmm??? Not traumatic, but uh...hinting? Foreshadowing? Showing what's to come for our favorite elf- I mean, elfe?
IMPENDING DOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM (fading away.......)